The Fallen of Angel

This is starting good, correct the little errors and you have pretty good start. I hope to keep watching this story unfolds.

You say at the start that you will be able to choose paths more loving and others hardcore, but starting pretty on the hard and wet side, i dont mind but some people do and will comment over it if you don´t change that description or make options to be less hard. I would say someting more on the lines of "some girls will treat you hard and other treat you lovely" if that is the road you are choosing for this.

As you have asked, mi opinion in memes is, dont use then in between, or just before sex scenes, will feel "cringy" for a lot of people. If you want to use them in the normal story parts i suppose people will not mind it a lot.

I hope this continues, this have very good potential.

There’s a few errors I got in the 0.2.ingles version. The label “splashscreen” appeared in screens.rpy and script.rpy, the label “start_real” appeared twice in script.rpy, and the label “test_video” appeared six times in script.rpy.

Here’s the full error text:

The label splashscreen is defined twice, at File "game/screens.rpy", line 1723:
label splashscreen:
and File "game/script.rpy", line 12:
label splashscreen:


The label start_real is defined twice, at File "game/script.rpy", line 25:
label start_real:
and File "game/script.rpy", line 73:
label start_real:


The label test_video is defined twice, at File "game/script.rpy", line 1240:
label test_video:
and File "game/script.rpy", line 1268:
label test_video:


The label test_video is defined twice, at File "game/script.rpy", line 1268:
label test_video:
and File "game/script.rpy", line 1290:
label test_video:


The label test_video is defined twice, at File "game/script.rpy", line 1290:
label test_video:
and File "game/script.rpy", line 1311:
label test_video:


The label test_video is defined twice, at File "game/script.rpy", line 1311:
label test_video:
and File "game/script.rpy", line 1431:
label test_video:


The label test_video is defined twice, at File "game/script.rpy", line 1431:
label test_video:
and File "game/script.rpy", line 1531:
label test_video: